Has the basis for a good yarn but it needs a little more depth and style and pre-publishing checks ( as do mine!) I enjoyed the read though .

Hi there! I just finished reading your story, and I have to say, I could visualize everything in my head while reading. You’ve created a story that feels really vivid, alive and expressive. I read very regularly and rarely come across such stories. I’m a commission artist who creates Webtoons, manga, and comic for authors, and while reading your work, I immediately thought about how powerful it would look in visual form. The pacing, tone, and tension are already there. If you're into the idea of converting the story into a comic or webtoon, I’d love to talk about how we could make that happen. Feel free to reach me on Discord (eve_verse). Regards, Evelyn