It's an interesting concept, but the English needs a bit of work. Check for missing words and typos. Also for such a short story there are too many point of views, and the ending is not really satifactory. It ends a bit too abruptly and too conveniently. More conflict is needed at this stage. It might be better aa a novella rather than a short, giving you more time to develop the characters.

I found this very mixed up and difficult to understand i think it has been translated badly

Interesting,a great piece there.. Great author you are Naomi..kudos